Thursday, 24 November 2011

Script.

The street is deserted and dark the rain is pouring and the street looks miserable. A dark figure stands under at the corner of the road illuminated only by the light of a single lamp post he stares off into the distance for a moment then silently crosses the road then moves towards a girl we see two hands in leather gloves wrap around her neck
(girl try's to scream).
 The dark figure is then in a thick wood standing by a deep body length hole he dumps an object wrapped up and taped in a bin liner into it.




Suzy is in her home drinking coffee while watching the news she sits down and turns the volume up, 

tv (vo) woman's: 
"Maddison Presmore has been missing for 2 weeks, detectives think her disappearance is linked to the serial killings done previous this month"

the main headline is about a local serial killer she turns of the t.v abruptly closes her eyes and massages her head.


We see a file for the serial killer case that was on the news previously on suzys desk then we see a flustured juliana walk in flustered and pester suzy to do a better job finding her daughters killer

Juliana: 
"C'mon detective theres GOT to be something you can do!"
 Suzy:
"Listen Mrs.Presley you know i wish i could, but i'm under so much pressure right now please just let me do my job"
Julian:
(tears up) "i'm just so worried"
Suzy:
"i know, i know well find her" 

 Just as Suzy goes to usher out Juliana the phone rings suzy goes to answer it the phone call gives them about an anonomous clue at a car park.


Juliana and Suzy arrive at the car park shadow a go along the wall and scurrying noises are heard.
Suzy:
"Dont worry its nothing,listen you stay here ill go investigate"
Juliana:
"NO! don't leave me!"
Suzy:
"Don't worry i'll be back" 

Suzy reassures juliana then goes off to investigate leaving Juliana on her own. The mysterious figure from the start emerges attacks and kills Juliana (juliana screams) then runs off. The figure gets into a car then pulls off her mask revealing her self to be Suzy.

1 comment:

  1. Good twist, some precise, sharp dialogue and a clear, easy-to-follow plotline. This is a good start.
    1- You need to add scene headings.
    2- You need to describe each character a little more at the start of each scene. Think especially about costume changes and any vital elements of their appearance.
    This is very promising so far!

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