EXT.STREET.NIGHT
The street is deserted and dark the rain is pouring,the street looks miserable. A dark figure stands under at the corner of the road illuminated only by the light of a single lamp post. He stares off into the distance for a moment then silently crosses the road then moves towards a girl. We see two hands in leather gloves wrap around her neck.
(girl tries to scream)
EXT.THICKWOOD.NIGHT
The dark figure is then in a thick wood standing by a deep body length hole he dumps an object wrapped up and taped in a bin liner into it.
INT.FRONTROOM.DAY
Suzy, in her mid 20's, tall, brunette and athletic is in her home drinking coffee while watching the news she sits down stiffly and turns the volume up,
the main headline is about a local serial killer she turns of the t.v abruptly closes her eyes and massages her head.
INT.OFFICE.DAY.
We see a file for the serial killer case that was on the news previously on suzys desk then we see a flustered Juliana 40 year old, blonde woman walk in flustered and pester suzy to do a better job finding her daughters killer
Just as Suzy goes to usher out Juliana the phone rings suzy goes to answer it the phone call gives them about an anonomous clue at a car park.
The street is deserted and dark the rain is pouring,the street looks miserable. A dark figure stands under at the corner of the road illuminated only by the light of a single lamp post. He stares off into the distance for a moment then silently crosses the road then moves towards a girl. We see two hands in leather gloves wrap around her neck.
(girl tries to scream)
EXT.THICKWOOD.NIGHT
The dark figure is then in a thick wood standing by a deep body length hole he dumps an object wrapped up and taped in a bin liner into it.
INT.FRONTROOM.DAY
Suzy, in her mid 20's, tall, brunette and athletic is in her home drinking coffee while watching the news she sits down stiffly and turns the volume up,
tv (vo) woman's:
"Maddison Presmore has been missing for 2 weeks, detectives think her disappearance is linked to the serial killings done previous this month"
the main headline is about a local serial killer she turns of the t.v abruptly closes her eyes and massages her head.
INT.OFFICE.DAY.
We see a file for the serial killer case that was on the news previously on suzys desk then we see a flustered Juliana 40 year old, blonde woman walk in flustered and pester suzy to do a better job finding her daughters killer
Juliana:
"C'mon detective theres GOT to be something you can do!"
Suzy:
"Listen Mrs.Presley you know i wish i could, but i'm under so much pressure right now please just let me do my job"
Julian:
(tears up) "i'm just so worried"
Suzy:
"i know, i know well find her"
EXT.CARPARK.NIGHT
Juliana and Suzy arrive at the car park shadow a go along the wall and scurrying noises are heard.
Suzy:
"Dont worry its nothing,listen you stay here ill go investigate"
Juliana:
"NO! don't leave me!"
Suzy:
"Don't worry i'll be back"
EXT.CAR PARK/CAR(intercut).NIGHT
Suzy reassures Juliana then goes off to investigate leaving Juliana on her own. The mysterious figure from the start emerges attacks and kills Juliana (Juliana screams) then runs off. The figure gets into a car then pulls off her mask revealing her self to be Suzy.
This is really good Sabira, you have added your scene headings and tweaked your stage directions and dialogue even further. If I was being hyper-critical, you still need to number your scenes, but otherwise, move onto your proposal now, this is a really good script!
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